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"“NO REST FOR THE DEAD, WICKED PHARAOH”" by Paul J. Doyle

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I decided to break out of a rut, and try something completely different. So I got into a little challenge with Elfwood writer Leigh Erickson: If she could write about something OTHER than death, I would write a death poem!
So here it is, about a fictitious Egyptian pharaoh named Chepankhtep (yes; I chickened out trying to come up with rhymes, so I left his name out of the poem! I hope it's exciting and fun . . . and has a twist. The Mexican mummies mentioned are no longer literally hanging around; they are in museums now. If you've ever seen the original 'Faces of Death', you've seen some of the Mexican mummies mentioned here. This is the very first attempt I've made at something this dark.
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“NO REST FOR THE DEAD, WICKED PHARAOH”


by Paul J. Doyle


Yawning shriveled parchment face with rotten eyes

Embalmed, leering, scaring away the nauseated flies

Disinterred and swinging on a rusting hook

Once the Pharaoh, now an anonymous crook

Your bombastic life filled with petty lies


Whip to the crack, flail to the slaves

Suffering under charlatan knaves

Knotted backs trembling, pocked with scars

Destinies written on the uncaring stars

Persecute the heathens from barbaric enclaves


Galloping fearless horses pull the chariot of wars

Sinewy soldiers savagely fierce, ridden with sores

Plucked from overcrowded farms on the Nile

Charging and trampling opponents for miles

Gluttonous officers beaming, rotten to the core.


Pyramids soaring inexorably to the clouds

Extorted tithing padding pharaohs under shrouds

Behind the scenes in the glorified palace

Pharaoh celebrates with Satan, raising the chalice,

Chuckling, triumphant and immeasurably proud.


Pharaoh overwhelms his noble-born foes

Satan’s imparted magic keeping them on their toes

Ungodly powers deposing the Deities and the High Priest

The purge has ended and the new “god” gets his special feast

Beautiful women dance and twirl in skimpy new clothes


Pharaoh’s “New” Egypt is a much changed place—

A never-ending stream of “relics” to deface.

The priests of Ra hide in catacombs,

Defiant of their impending dooms.

Satan pulls the real strings and sets the pace.


Oppressed Egyptians chafe under Pharaoh’s rule

Satan opportunistically concocts a new tool.

Pharaoh’s arrogance reaches astounding height

His staff is powerless without Satan’s might

Satan knows the time is ripe to depose the fool.


Counter-revolution breaks out across the land

Twenty years’ feeding from an autocratic Hand

Forced to worship unholy abominations

Banned from the old denominations

Time to sweep the Heretic under the sand!


Death and bloodshed on a tremendous scale;

Satan is beyond catching the tiger by the tale.

The Nile floods on cue, unleashing a plague

Pharaoh’s powers weaken, increasingly vague.

Satan stops his heart and covers up his trail.


Dead Pharaoh is mummified and sealed away

The Old Gods resume their national sway.

The new godly king purges and launches wars of “Good”

Patching up rifts; Dead Pharaoh was “misunderstood.”

Satan chuckles knowingly, waiting for another day . . .


In Guanajuato, Mexico of old, the dead were displaced

When the grave tax was unpaid, the cadavers were replaced.

Mummified by the elements and left for years by the score

Dangling in groups, indignity leaking from every sore

Their desperately impoverished families unsolaced.


Satan rises again in Guanajuato with brand new tricks

He switches the Pharaoh with a Mexican layer of bricks

The laborer rests at last, entombed in monumental glory

Pharaoh swings with peons, but that is not the end of his story.

Satan always needs piddling fools to get his unholy kicks.


Yawning shriveled parchment face with rotten eyes

Embalmed, leering, scaring away the nauseated flies.

Disinterred and swinging on a rusting hook

Once the Pharaoh, now an anonymous crook

Your bombastic life filled with petty lies.











 

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24 Oct 200345 Song Qu
Hey, nice poem man! I'd like to see more of these from you, if you feel like it. I mean, yeah, the rest are quite funny especially the Santa ones, but... ah whatever. Your choice.
Kudos!

1 Paul J. Doyle replies: "Thanks, Song! Unfortunately, the essay I wrote got turned down by the moderators, and WoodWorks wasn't interested. If you have access to Elftown, I am going to place it on a wiki-page. I will also forward you a copy, since I had you in mind when I wrote it.

Thanks again for the comment! A poem like this is totally new for me, and should there be enough reader interest (and creative inspiration on my part) I will write a follow-up."
24 Oct 200345 Pirate Theif
Dude, that's AWESOME! gee, wish i could do that...u r SOOO COOL!

1 Paul J. Doyle replies: "Thanks! It was a lot of fun to write. I had thoughts of 1950s-1960s era Cast of Thousands movies in mind (You know, like "Ben-Hur" and "The Ten Commandments"), along with your average Iron Maiden album cover art, early Metallica lyrics, and---most of all---the long-repressed desire to write something truly diabolic that would get all those phony money-grubbing televangelists flustered and bent out of shape. Heck, it was a blast writing this! And yes, I have seen most of the volumes of "Faces of Death", even that obviously fake episode with the guy with googly eyes. (Part 4, I think . . . it's been a few years since I saw them . . .)
Anyhow, none of the other stuff on my page comes close to being this dark, but have fun reading some of that. Thanks again for commenting!"
10 Nov 200345 Archane
*Stares in amazement* *Bows down before a master of poetry* Raow! Very dark and depressing! You do a good job of portraying his tortured undead self too, by the way! *Two thumbs up* I'm impressed. *Nods*

1 Paul J. Doyle replies: "Thanks, Archane! I'm hardly a master poet, though I do try my best. I have left room for a sequel, and depending on what happens on the Elftown wiki-page we're on (that is, if it holds together!) I may weave those wiki-posts into future chapters of this story. I have to say I was surprised how dark and flowing this poem turned out! Thanks again for commenting,"
27 Nov 200345 Isabelle Apel
Yowza. o_o that was cool. Mixing satan with the egyptian mythology is kinda weird, but y'know what ? It works. And is kinda creepy '<.

You really have a way with words. Wow. It's a story, it's a poem, it's both and it's great! ^-^

1 Paul J. Doyle replies: "Thanks, Isabelle! It felt so good writing this, in a darkly therapeutic way. Between this poem and that vampire pic I drew on Elftown, diversifying has been fun. I have left the door open for a sequel . . ."
27 Dec 200345 Savian
Oh, and I'm really trying to be helpful, NOT MEAN, if I came across as nasty I did not mean to. 1

12 Paul J. Doyle replies: "  Not at all . . . I just think you misread the poem. No, I am not an Egyptologist. If I go wrong with factual Kemet stuff, scream at me. I'm fair game. If you were mindlessly flaming me as "Anonymous", I would have given you the Fry-o-lator treatment. No, by all means keep commenting!"
27 Dec 200345 Savian
I don't understand. It offends me, the mixing of satan with Kemet (ancient Egypt.) I don't know about your sources, but I can tell you that Egyptians did not worship satan.

Some people do practice the ancient Egyptian religion. Would you like someone to imply that you were actually following another, and evil, god? Okay, maybe the fictional pharaoh was mean, but it just seems ignorant to mix him with a totally different god.

2 Paul J. Doyle replies: "OK, i thought I made it rather clear that the familiar Egyptian gods (Ra, Anubis, Bast, Seth, etc) were temporarily replaced with a satanic form of monotheism. Then Pharaoh Chepankhtep (the pharaoh here) got deposed, and everybody's favorite Egyptian pantheon was restored. Sorry if I threw you off.

I was partially influenced by the historic pharaoh who brought in a benevolent single god. Imenhotep IV, if I'm not mistaken. "Akhenaton". So I decided to go negative."
21 Mar 2004:-) Donna Quinn
Hi Paul!

I LOVE this poem! I know I've told you this before, but I haven't read the poem in a few months (complete hard drive wipe in January made sure of that) so it was really good to see it again! I'm glad you've put it up- I only wish you got a Mod's Choice for it though.
I agree with Patricia in that it is a real improvement in that is flows so beautifully- although I thought your Classical Dragon's Lament had the same lovely flow. Anyway, great poem! But of course I've already told you this.
-Donna.
10 Oct 200445 L. Shanra 'Usagi' Kuepers
You know... I'm not quite sure how to write the comment, so bear with me. ^-^; Savian has a point with the comment, but I don't quite agree with the reason. To me, the relation with the actual historical facts of Akhenaton was quite obvious and the way you tied Egypt in with Mexico was very creative and well done ^-^

I think the main 'issue' there is to have with the poem is that you purposefully name the evil entity behind everything. And you give it a Christian name. If that makes any sense. I think if the entity remained nameless, that could improve the impact as well as let people make up their own minds. But that's mere specuclation I strongly recommend getting a second opinion on and are free to completely ignore. ^-^

Anyway, that's it for the (more or less?) negative side. It's a good poem, Paul. ^-^ It flows very well and it rhymes. By jolly it RHYMES! I love rhyming poetry! ^-^ The fact that you use a limerick as rhymic scheme is very interesting, too. I suppose it's a form of poetry that I'm clueless about? ^-^;

It's a great poem, all in all, though. ^-^ You're good at writing them.
28 Apr 200745 Someone you dont know! =]
I love this poem. It sounds like something I wrote when I was ten except my poem was only 3 stanzas. The 3nd stanza is:

To see the forgotten slain
To hear them scream in vain
To see the present repeating the past

Well anyway good poem and I'll look for the rest of your stuff. Buh Bye For Now!
25 Apr 2008:-) Diane (Grandamelf) Reed
A very interesting poem! I must say you have quiet an imagination! But I knew that!1 I like it!
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 • Keywords: Death, Pharaoh, Satan, Egypt, Mexico, Disinterred, Graves, Intrigue, Deception, Undead, History, Fiction, Wars, Rebellion, False, Gods, Betrayal, Switching, Places
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